Thursday, February 21, 2013

FSF: An Abandoned House



Five Sentence Fiction, made possible by Lillie McFerrin, challenges you to pack a fictional punch in a mere five sentences.  Weekly prompts are given as inspiration.

This week's prompt: ABANDONED

For those who've missed any chapters in the "Unchained" saga, you can find the entire story HERE.

Unchained
Chapter 20: An Abandoned House

Ylana looked back at the woman in open-mouthed awe, frozen in place by the implications of all she’d learned.

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Nara stood and gestured to the rest of the woman’s house, which was nothing more than sagging beams, rotting wood, and disintegrating brick, and therefore scarcely suitable for human habitation.  “Is this so much better,” she began, meeting the woman’s cold gaze head-on, “living in an abandoned house to escape detection, living in constant fear of your ex-husband finding you or of authorities tracing all those dead bodies back to you?”

Seeing what her friend was trying to do, Ylana sat up straight as a faint spark of hope came to life inside her.

“And what would you propose I do differently?” the woman inquired, a hint of intrigue coloring her words.

8 comments:

  1. The pic with the clip...phew...imagery overload! Also, loved your entry for the she said what? Bloghop!

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  2. The pic with the clip...phew...imagery overload! Also, loved your entry for the she said what? Bloghop!

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  3. I saw a unique use of something which has been deemed abandoned = What better place to hide than some place no one will never think of looking, a place which has been abandoned for a long period of time, a place in which there's been no life. It's like a live person lying down motionless with corpses laying all around.

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  4. I think I missed the past few installments. Now I'm intrigued. Gotta go and read the others! :)

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  5. Totally intriguing exchange here, one senses the appraisal of each other in these words!

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  6. It's the perfect place to hide and avoid detection. I love the interaction between the characters here, a hint of friendly sarcasm. x

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