tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post5026617341931103254..comments2024-02-06T15:18:05.390-06:00Comments on Writing Off the Edge: The World Building Blogfest: World Building ExcerptL.G. Keltnerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07624902347418621283noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-39995695344101865492013-02-01T14:06:58.049-06:002013-02-01T14:06:58.049-06:00You've given a good description of the Kentari...You've given a good description of the Kentari, but perhaps you could go one step further. Explain why they are so secretive (besides their fear). Do they have religious beliefs that forbid it? Or is it political? He says Terrans can use their mind like that, but does she believe it?<br />Great scene!Karen Elizabeth Brownhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17190485992966502931noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-31182442605518951502013-02-01T09:29:13.666-06:002013-02-01T09:29:13.666-06:00I'm not a world builder, but I did share your ...I'm not a world builder, but I did share your blogfest with a fellow writer who is. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04419944234795666194noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-27929805325127874932013-02-01T08:01:18.938-06:002013-02-01T08:01:18.938-06:00I was drawn in and definitely want to know more. T...I was drawn in and definitely want to know more. Thanks for sharing.<br /><br />Purple eyes, white hair, and gray skin. WOW!Yolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-74245622905893048062013-02-01T07:04:50.136-06:002013-02-01T07:04:50.136-06:00I enjoyed reading this. You're good with desc...I enjoyed reading this. You're good with description and you don't go overboard with it. I would change "black, loose-fitting black clothing" to "loose-fitting black clothing."Jolie du Prehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01134800013010890881noreply@blogger.com