tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post1090144205293900342..comments2024-02-06T15:18:05.390-06:00Comments on Writing Off the Edge: WEP June Challenge-Urban NightmareL.G. Keltnerhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07624902347418621283noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-57435667224709272942020-08-13T10:49:57.224-05:002020-08-13T10:49:57.224-05:00Clever use "join in the fight.
Against all th...Clever use "join in the fight.<br />Against all the entries, it is stand alone for it spositivity and hope.Sanhita Mukherjeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02343518865837305340noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-23085296534369881902020-06-22T16:28:04.593-05:002020-06-22T16:28:04.593-05:00Well done! This is the current moment encapsulated...Well done! This is the current moment encapsulated in less than 500 words. And you made it rhyme and gave it cadence. How will we wake up from this nightmare, indeed? I, like Denise, think that we are the architects of our own extinction. However, I believe in hope because without it, there is truly nothing.Donna Hantonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14620841692960550354noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-8325345074154303902020-06-22T11:51:57.520-05:002020-06-22T11:51:57.520-05:00Thanks L.G. You echoed my thoughts, feelings and o...Thanks L.G. You echoed my thoughts, feelings and own prose poem, Opt Out. Rest assured that we who warn are fighting everyday with pen and hands on in the mess, relentlessly. We do not want to give up on changing to save our beautiful lives and planet. Maybe Nature , once again, is cleaning up for self-preservation. If our species must go, so be it.Susan B.Rouchardhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08801283790969288263noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-49662084555944723842020-06-22T05:55:44.830-05:002020-06-22T05:55:44.830-05:00First of all - I found that your poem had a lovely...First of all - I found that your poem had a lovely flow and rhythm, despite the dark subject matter. How strange is life right now? We couldn't have made this up had we tried. Kalpanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02503951641129389045noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-65712608937679838242020-06-21T03:48:26.592-05:002020-06-21T03:48:26.592-05:00Hi Laura - I'd say an exceptional poem ... wit...Hi Laura - I'd say an exceptional poem ... with some amazing prescient lines ... so clever and I'd endorse all the complements set out by the commenters. <br /><br />A brilliant poem on life that's been, is and we all hope will be ... <br />"Scary as the future is<br />we must work to make it bright.<br />Life and society will never improve if<br />good people don’t join in the Hilary Melton-Butcherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17596532480645510678noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-80577197473885941162020-06-20T14:41:06.216-05:002020-06-20T14:41:06.216-05:00A fantastic poem, that captures the turbulence of ...A fantastic poem, that captures the turbulence of the times. Well done. Christopher Scott Authorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08627870625577204377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-10911357755923539962020-06-20T00:32:49.639-05:002020-06-20T00:32:49.639-05:00It isn't easy to fight for change. I sometimes...It isn't easy to fight for change. I sometimes wonder if the pandemic gave people more time to do just that. Jamiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12343722894608893190noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-47681817684056913342020-06-19T22:10:11.386-05:002020-06-19T22:10:11.386-05:00You say poetry isn't your strongest suit, then...You say poetry isn't your strongest suit, then post this? Come on, this poem is fantastic! And you nailed the reality going on everywhere. J Lenni Dornerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07961335286982498158noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-84628492170893373662020-06-19T06:16:00.085-05:002020-06-19T06:16:00.085-05:00A very emotive poem encompassing and resonating my...A very emotive poem encompassing and resonating my feelings at the moment. Sallyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14090018804016223955noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-70144722708513205322020-06-19T02:04:24.619-05:002020-06-19T02:04:24.619-05:00Love it, but then I love poetry.
It’s so much eas...Love it, but then I love poetry. <br />It’s so much easier to get to the punch!!! <br />You do this so well. The last line has echoes of Edmund Burke, who once said <br /> "The only thing necessary for the triumph of evil is for good men to do nothing."<br />Well done! <br />Carole <br />Carole Stolzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00354093237208745943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-12628794406613378822020-06-18T23:24:06.616-05:002020-06-18T23:24:06.616-05:00Poetry was definitely the right way to go with thi...Poetry was definitely the right way to go with this one. There's not much I can say, because it's just so accurate right now.Shannon Lawrencehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00934641808195675935noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-67006222591700655242020-06-18T17:32:39.426-05:002020-06-18T17:32:39.426-05:00I want to agree with your initial comment about, &...I want to agree with your initial comment about, " Giving in to despair solves nothing." There are days when I despair, but then I reach out mentally and hope. Maybe we're living a disaster that fits our high-tech, fast-paced era. And even if humans destroy themselves, life will find a way to continue.<br /><br />Anyway, your poem says this so much better, although you correctly Roland Clarkehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03302133565980901397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-5223423734568346892020-06-18T16:42:10.999-05:002020-06-18T16:42:10.999-05:00A moving piece that encourages amidst dark times. ...A moving piece that encourages amidst dark times. Thank you for sharing this work.Karunahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15186228086930843202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-3896347590280445132020-06-18T06:00:50.277-05:002020-06-18T06:00:50.277-05:00Poetry does what prose can't begin - well done...Poetry does what prose can't begin - well done! Your poem reflects the situation in your immediate surroundings and sadly, also in my country. Unfortunately not all nations have dealt with the pandemic as well as NZ and Germany have. <br />I do hope these events will lead to reflection and course correction. We really need a pandemic of compassion and clear thinking to reset priorities.Nilanjana Bosehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08656370320322301943noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-18009374458011416932020-06-17T20:56:53.560-05:002020-06-17T20:56:53.560-05:00For a non-poet, Laura, you have dazzled. Yes, the ...For a non-poet, Laura, you have dazzled. Yes, the end of the world has been prophesied so many times. True believers have been left standing, waiting, for something that never happened. But I do believe we'll self-immolate one day. I think the pandemic means life will be different to how it was before, but mainly in a good way. Never hurts to be more hygienic etc. <br /><br />I guess we writeDenise Covey https://www.blogger.com/profile/07106490051555233439noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-56826099738509358022020-06-17T18:22:30.789-05:002020-06-17T18:22:30.789-05:00I'm in the same boat when it comes to end time...I'm in the same boat when it comes to end time prophecies, but I agree, what comes may turn out to be a self-fulfilling prophecy.L.G. Keltnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07624902347418621283noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-39740192326924241212020-06-17T17:20:39.932-05:002020-06-17T17:20:39.932-05:00I'm not religious so I don't believe in an...I'm not religious so I don't believe in any sort of end times prophecies. However, if people don't change and stop attacking each other and destroying our planet, I think at some point we will be well and truly screwed.Ornery Owl of Naughty Netherworld Press and Readers Roost https://www.blogger.com/profile/07596105116325246476noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-5295101193556115192020-06-17T16:44:02.493-05:002020-06-17T16:44:02.493-05:00This is a sad story which reflects our sad reality...This is a sad story which reflects our sad reality all too well. The poetic form only straightens that impression. Olga Godimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00358026814685611301noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-43009923832487263492020-06-17T09:49:57.940-05:002020-06-17T09:49:57.940-05:00You've captured our moment in time beautifully...You've captured our moment in time beautifully! Well done, may favorite though "we must work to make it bright.<br />Life and society will never improve if<br />good people don’t join in the fight." So very, very true! And yes this is where my hope comes from!!!Yolanda Renéehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09085436784133103221noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-12378804771551493282020-06-17T09:00:56.931-05:002020-06-17T09:00:56.931-05:00Simple yet powerful descriptions of the emotions b...Simple yet powerful descriptions of the emotions being felt by many. Excellent entry.Toi Thomashttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07493934864387695248noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-26364594393947305202020-06-17T08:26:12.659-05:002020-06-17T08:26:12.659-05:00So well done. This line "our societal sicknes...So well done. This line "our societal sickness festers" is such an apt description. We need to do better, be better, and learn to take care of each other better!Jemi Fraserhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02214408467456320167noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-29550479030389271672020-06-17T06:38:25.992-05:002020-06-17T06:38:25.992-05:00Hi,
I love your succinct descriptions of how you p...Hi,<br />I love your succinct descriptions of how you perceive the world at the moment. Most of all I like the resonance of hope that you bring out in the end.<br />Great job and all the best and don't give up. There are people with hope out there. I know because I am one of them.<br />Shalom aleichem,<br />Pat GPat Garciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04204650731843984192noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-30878135321529653182020-06-17T02:40:09.199-05:002020-06-17T02:40:09.199-05:00That's such an apt description of our times. A...That's such an apt description of our times. And could we have ever imagined the world coming to such an impasse. Your poem reflects urban nightmare in its real sense as we see it today.<br />Sonia from https://soniadogra.comA Hundred Quillshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01074191241031721056noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-5171670007828382529.post-34805220249183795132020-06-17T01:19:33.970-05:002020-06-17T01:19:33.970-05:00I hope (so much) that the viral pandemic is replac...I hope (so much) that the viral pandemic is replaced by one of kindness and justice. Hope it, but will not hold my breath (blue is not my colour).<br />While we all face the same stormy seas our boats are very different.<br />Your poem spoke loudly to me. Thank you. 2020 has been a shocker.Elephant's Childhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06650565833097914052noreply@blogger.com