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Saturday, April 11, 2015

J is for Jiffy


Here's another drabble for you!  A drabble is a story told in precisely 100 words. They're short, but challenging to write.

Today's word: JIFFY

I am speaking of the brevity of a moment in time, and not of the peanut butter.  Enjoy!

Jiffy

“Become immortal for a small fee!  It’ll only take a jiffy!” the advertisement proclaimed.

Jimmy stared at the TV, his lip quirked in amusement.  The idea of promoting a time-efficient means of achieving immortality was laughable as it was.  Claiming that it was cheap, however . . .

The blood bags chilling in his fridge were a testament to the steep price that accompanied immortality.  The price was paid by the people from whom that blood was taken.  It was also paid for by centuries of loneliness.  The faces of his family were long forgotten now, as were those of lost lovers.

12 comments:

  1. How fun to find you on the one day I'm visiting Belgium! I'll be dipping into peanut butter that is very jiffy.

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  2. This was nicely done! I like the reveal of Jimmy's true nature and why he would scoff at such an ad. Well, anyone would, but especially him.

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  3. Paying the fee in blood....I'd go with the TV ad personally!

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  4. So very intriguing. I want to read more about Jimmy's story. I'm enjoying your flash fiction. Great stuff!

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  5. I love how much you pack into such small snippets! I'd be intrigued to read on and find out more about this character's world ... and history ... and of course to find out what will happen next.

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  6. Immortality - become a vampire...
    I do like Jiff Peanut Butter though.

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  7. I love the word drabble -- I'm gonna have to use it at every opportunity now. LOL And this was a great snippet. It doesn't feel like just 100 words. :)

    Donna

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  8. hi, keltner,

    Jiffy is a cute choice, brevity is smart bright too.

    :)

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  9. Well done, and exactly 100 words. Impressive.

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