Thursday, November 8, 2012

FSF: Hosting

Time for another Five Sentence Fiction installment.  Visit Lillie McFerrin to learn more about this fun weekly event!

The prompt for this week is character.  She asked that those who are doing NaNoWriMo post five sentences about a character from their NaNo project.  For a variety of reasons I am not participating in NaNoWriMo, but I took this as a good opportunity to provide a little snapshot of a formative event in Ylana's life. My goal was to show more of her motivations, and thus build a platform for what she may ultimately do with her freedom.


PS-If you are at all behind on reading the installments, you can go to this PAGE to catch up!

Chapter 5: Hosting

At age ten, Ylana helped her mother pin her grandmother to the living room floor while a doctor pulled out a syringe containing the viscous blue sludge that represented the Kryllian parasite, another obligation thrust upon the women of the Imbara caste.

The doctor injected the foreign organism through the immobilized woman’s nostril, and as it attached itself to her central nervous system, she began to tremble uncontrollably. 

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“It’ll all be over soon,” the doctor assured Ylana, who had turned pale with horror at the sight, but everyone in that room knew this was a lie.

From that point on, the parasite used her grandmother’s genetic material to create new Kryllian parasites, which had to be removed from her body twice a year, and though the limit for hosthood was set at ten years, many couldn’t endure the demands of this grueling process for that long.

Ylana watched as her beloved grandmother’s body failed system by system, until seven years later the doctor returned to perform the final removal procedure, which ended with the medical man toting away the healthy Kryllian while the ravaged woman died on the floor.

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  1. Wow! Really liked it. You've written five really long sentences, but they don't seem so long. They flow really nicely! :)

  2. Nice! Sounds like a horrible culture to live in, but an interesting story :)


  3. Jesus, that is brutal.

    Well done. (shudder)


  4. On the floor!? The cold hearted bath plugs! Said it before and I shall say it again - loving this continuation. Looking forward to the next mini chapter :)

  5. I need to get caught up now....

    It may of only been five sentences but powerful they were.Flowing together and showing insight to the character and culture.You sure had it planned,huh?I look forward to getting caught up on the stories involving Ylana and her adventures

  6. Pretty horrific, but great writing and description! Had me hooked!

  7. I keep coming back. The story is beginning to be addictive.