I've seen posts for Five Sentence Fiction all over the place since I started on this blogging journey, but I've never tried it before. For all of you who don't know about it, you can visit Lillie McFerrin's site for more details.
The prompt for this week is "detour." I now present to you my first attempt at writing a story in five sentences.
Detour
Three moons were already climbing the dusky violet sky, and
Ylana sat amongst the blue-veined ferns, watching with bated breath as the
beautiful Nara bathed in the crystalline pool below.
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Nara already made her proposal, and Ylana need only climb
inside that sleek starship to accept the adventures that always eluded
her. Close friends said that such
actions were only a detour, that she must eventually accept her fate, but Ylana
knew that some detours could last a lifetime.
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I sense a fabulous adventure to follow...It's always fun to take a detour and rebel!
ReplyDeleteI'm with Sarah on this one, plus I wanted to know more about the world they are on, and where they had been and what they were going to do. Thank you :)
ReplyDeleteThat is a beginning of a epic story!
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ReplyDeleteA fine beginning.
Excellent first FSF. Welcome aboard!
Cheers!
JzB
Cool. Five Sentence Science Fiction! Liked it!
ReplyDeleteSuch a lot of imagery in this, and such a lot of background in five short sentences. Intriguing.
ReplyDeleteCompletely captivating, I hope there's more to come.
ReplyDeleteWoo-hoo! Good job! Welcome to FSF. I can't help thinking there's quite a bit of your own inner longing in this. You could certainly be expressing the feelings of a lot of women who grew to fulfill others' dreams and put their own on hold. Lovely piece, L.G.
ReplyDeleteAwesome job! I love a good rebel :) I'm so glad you've joined in on FSF. I'm behind on reading, so off to read your sentences for Flawed!!
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