Tuesday, December 14, 2021

WEP December Challenge-Narcissus

Happy December! It's time for the final Write...Edit...Publish challenge of the year. That means the year of art is coming to an end, and we're closing it out with NARCISSUS

It sure has been a fun year. A lot of you seemed to enjoy drawing inspiration from famous works of art. It wasn't always an easy task, but we saw some amazing entries! Next year, we're doing a year of music, and I'm confident we'll find plenty of inspiration with that as well.

The piece is want to share with you today is related to the novel I'm currently writing. The character here isn't a POV character in the book, but I thought it would be fun to get into his head and write something from his perspective for this month's prompt. I hope you enjoy!


Tagline: Some people require adoration and total obedience.


The mirror revealed perfectly styled dark hair and piercing blue eyes. Dorian smiled and appreciated the change in his reflection. He adjusted the collar of his navy blue shirt.

“Go out there and wow them all,” he told himself. “They already look up to you. Now it’s time to make them love you.”

His group of followers started out small, but it had been steadily growing week to week. Word of mouth spread rapidly amongst the desperate. He fed them hope until they were fit to burst. He promised them all a better life, so long as they lived the lifestyle he prescribed to them.

A knock on the door pulled Dorian from his thoughts. He turned to see Trella’s shy smile. The girl was barely twenty, and when he’d first met her, she had been filled to the brim with frustration and resigned to her circumstances. She’d utterly transformed in the last few weeks. A light shone in her eyes that hadn’t been there before.

“Everyone’s getting anxious out there,” she said, her voice soft. She was in awe of him. That awe radiated out of every pore. She would do almost anything he asked. He’d wager his reputation on it. Given a little more time, she would be completely under his control.

What’s in store for you? he wondered. What purpose will you serve?

“I’d better get out there, then,” he said aloud.

Trella’s smile grew. “Good luck out there.” She paused a moment before adding, “Not that you need it.”

Dorian returned the smile. He didn’t need luck. He needed devotion, and if this girl was any indication, he didn’t need to worry at all. “I’ll see you afterwards.”

When he exited the room, he made sure to brush gently against her shoulder as he moved past. A surge of satisfaction welled up within him as Trella’s cheeks reddened in response.

It was only a short stroll down a narrow corridor before he reached the stage entrance. The sounds of the people swelled to greet him as he approached. They couldn’t see him yet, but the anticipation in the air felt electric. He breathed deep and relished in the feeling.

A few steps more took him around the corner and onto the stage.

Instead of increasing in volume, the murmurs of the audience fell away, resulting in dead silence. Each pair of eyes in the room came to bear upon him. Backs straightened. Faces turned up. Every person in the room was on the edge of their seat, waiting eagerly to hear what Dorian had to say.

It would be rude to keep them waiting.

The lights beamed down on Dorian, creating a cone of illumination around his body. He held his arms out and tilted his head slightly upward. “Welcome. I’m so glad to see so many of you here,” he began.

He lowered his gaze so he could get a good view of the people who filled the room. There weren’t enough seats for them all, so many stood against the walls. He’d need to rent out a larger room for the next gathering.

See me. Love me. Trust me.

Dorian didn’t speak the commands, but he didn’t need to. The audience was already obeying him. He felt it in the energy of the room. No one moved a muscle as they waited for him to continue.

“I’ve been telling you all along that change will not come easy. I will never lie to you, no matter how much simpler that would be for me. So many have lied to you your entire lives, and you all deserve so much better than that. I’m so glad to see all of you still here, so willing to do all it takes to succeed. I even see some new faces tonight. That’s wonderful.” A clip-on microphone carried his words effortlessly over the people assembled before him. “I will shelter you when you need it. I will do whatever I can to build you up into the most powerful people you can be. Those you love may look down on you now. They may think you’ve lost your minds. From their perspectives, they see a stranger who doesn’t know your way of life. They probably think I’m selling you a bag of goods that can’t possibly be real. When they talk badly about me and the changes you’re making in your lives, they genuinely feel as though they’re doing the right thing. They think they’re saving you.” Dorian laughed. “They couldn’t be more wrong.”

Only I can save you. Only I can make you happy.

“If you follow my regimen, it’s only a matter of time before they see how mistaken they’ve been. By eating the right foods, doing the right exercises, and removing yourself from toxic family and friend relationships, you can ascend to something greater.”

Leave everything else behind. Follow me. Worship me.

“Are you ready to walk away from the old and embrace the new?”

The applause was thunderous. People cheered and called his name. He closed his eyes and let the waves of adoration wash over him.

This is where I’m supposed to be. I have the power to shape people the way I want them. They're mine.

Word Count: 874


  1. Well done Laura - people can enthral us, then sweep us along ... if we're not able to think for ourselves. I feel for the audience ... and just wondered if Trella wasn't going to transform and save all.

    I struggled to get here to the blog - there seemed to be a loop but worked my way round.

    All the best and have a peaceful season in the run down to 2022 - which I do hope will be better for us all. Cheers Hilary

  2. Nicely done!
    People are so often willing to believe in big words, big presence, big atmosphere. That mob mentality can be terrifying. I hope Trella managed to break free.
    (you've linked to WEP at the WEP site instead of here :) )

    1. Thanks for letting me know! This is what happens when I add things while tired.

  3. Nasty, nasty, nasty. And totally believable.
    'Only I can save you. Only I can make you happy' and the unspoken subtext is 'only you can make ME happy'.

  4. What a horrible person. I don't mind someone in love with himself - it's his business after all. But when he insists on everyone loving him, it becomes a cult, and I hate those guys, the cult leaders.
    A powerful story, Laura.

  5. Mob mentality is frightening. And it's real.
    The 'leaders' of these movements play on the vulnerabilities of people who want to 'belong' somewhere and want somebody to believe in.
    It's interesting that your character is named Dorian - reminiscent of the ultimate narcissist, Oscar Wilde's Dorian Gray.
    I enjoyed your snippet!

  6. Scary, because it's true in so many instances. There are people who need someone to follow and people need others to follow them. Well done!

  7. Hi Laura. The power of the mob can be a frightening thing, especially when whipped up by a Narcissus. Redolent of our times. Great use of the prompt!

  8. Echoes of Trump. It's an amazing thing how people buy into this. Well done.

  9. Scary but true! Our society has been riddled with "THESE" people since the beginning of time. So many can't and won't think for themselves, so they are swept away in waves of emotion. We ALL need to be aware, now more than ever, NOT to be taken in by these charlatans. Well done!

  10. I can name 10 of these people in the news now. That is truly scary! And they all have followers that adore them. OMG, we are so lost in a loop of our own making. Well told!

  11. Why do people put their faith in such charlatans? Despicable and scary and way too close to reality for comfort! Well crafted.

  12. Such a real-feeling portrait. I get how the charlatan come to be…. I still don’t really understand those who follow.

  13. Scary, but there seems to be some truth in it.

  14. Yikes, I've met too many people like this. You've done a great job putting them on a page.

    I'm enjoying #WRiTECLUB2021 over at DL Hammons blog. The entries are fun to read and vote on with feedback.
    Plus, I'm currently reading Patricia Lynne's Being Human.
    And I'm scheduling debut author interviews at Operation Awesome.
    I hope you have some fun plans for the rest of 2021. πŸŽ„πŸŽ†⛸πŸ₯✉πŸ₯‚⛄ May your days ahead be merry and filled with positive experiences.

  15. What a well written and plausible aspect of Narcissism - and a particularly scary one too.